The Bridge

This topic was created in the Books forum by ariesheart on Friday, November 3, 2017 and has 9 replies.

Looking for volunteer readers to read my 33 page short story, "The Bridge". Send me your email address, and I will send over a free manuscript. After reading please go on Amazon and leave a review. Thank you in advance.

The Bridge - Riya Jordan and her friends are excited about their trip to Brazil for a wildlife and forest organization before heading off to college. However, things take a turn for the worst when bodies are found mangled among their campgrounds by two predatorial stalkers. They are forced to run and find safety, but ends up helpless on a battered bridge.

While on this bridge, not only are they preyed upon by these beasts, but other deathly mishaps occurs

on... THE BRIDGE.

@Mr_Pinchy

9 Years5,000+ Posts

You like the letter "s" too much.

"They are forced to run and find safety, but ends up helpless on a battered bridge. "

"End up" is correct.

"not only are they preyed upon by these beasts, but other deathly mishaps occurs"

"Mishaps occur" is correct.

Normally i'm not a grammar nazi but since you want to write i think its best to tell you such mistakes detract from the professionalism of your prose. It just doesnt look good.

You can send me a link by pm here or post a link for everyone, i wont give an email.

@ariesheart

11 Years

Thank you. I believe my phone did that because it's correct in my folder. I copied and paste

Posted by Mr_Pinchy
You like the letter "s" too much.

"They are forced to run and find safety, but ends up helpless on a battered bridge. "

"End up" is correct.

"not only are they preyed upon by these beasts, but other deathly mishaps occurs"

"Mishaps occur" is correct.

Normally i'm not a grammar nazi but since you want to write i think its best to tell you such mistakes detract from the professionalism of your prose. It just doesnt look good.

You can send me a link by pm here or post a link for everyone, i wont give an email.