horoscopes love story

hi, I'm doing a love story on Capricorn male and Pisces female

pleas comment and tell me what you think

Setting in a live theater. at night two teenagers bump in to each other. one of them got drunk.

The air smelt of mint chocolate and peeper, my ears thump from the loud crowd of people and violin and jazz music. I was walking down a red velvet stars towards a bright big stage where an orchestra played. My clothes were soaked in my sweat. The room was sniping so fast like a top and i almost collapsed when is looked up in to these mint green mosey eyes. Fell in to this girls arms.

she whispers in a soft gentle voice.

Pisces: "Are you okay?"

She garbs my warm most palms in to her soft icy fragile hands....

I can feel a hot liquid dripping from my nose.

She takes me in to a room

Change of setting they are in a bath room in a hotel the theater in part of a five stare hotel. the bath room is in her hotel room.

The room is lit with the moon light coming from the window and light bonces off the dark blue tile walls.

we sit down on the rim of a bath tub.

She wets a white cloth. I can taste the metallic blood drip on to my lips, and she covers my nose with the warm damp cloth that soothes my pain.

her fiery red hair falls on her four head, and I can't help but brush it away.

Capricorn: " Thank you..."

His golden hair falls on my nose. I look up at his sea blue eyes.

She wipes my reddish fat lips with the damp cloth.

Then I lean in and press my lips ageist hers.

She grabs my hair and runs her fingers through it.

I rap my fingers around her waist.

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Wow, i'll follow this story.

thanks so much

thanks