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Erotic Writing
A is cool and relatable, in that 1. the excitement of anticipating the first time with someone you've wanted bad & 2. I've also considered murder in such a fashion
B. I LOVE IT. at first it reminded me of when Angelina Jolie allegedly paid for a hit man on herself, then it clicked what this woman was paying for, and thats just as masochistic.
C. This is a whole full-fleshed short story. I appreciate that each of these stories involve violence as well. I think as of now, C is my favorite. It would be funnier if the island was Alcatraz or similar, and he was held in solitary confinement, her being the warden. Funny in that his love is likely so abysmally unreciprocated, and that I've heard that prisoner/prison staff affairs are common.
as far as kittens' input regarding cheapening sex by offering it for profit, as long as you aren't relying on commissions you are uninterested in fulfilling, its nothing more than a self-imposed project, honing creative writing skills of a subject matter passionate to you. no one minded when Anne Rice did it 🤷♀️ sex is sacred but its also animalistic, and its a shame that humans load it with moral hang-ups. although if you wrote about passionless fraternity/Jersey Shore club sex where the goal is to get your body count as high as possible that could also be hilarious, especially in seeing what their lives would become down the line, due to what personality would seek zero-emotion sex just to get numbers up: I'd say either a sociopath, or a conservative Christian who would later settle into a frumpy nuclear family.
B. I LOVE IT. at first it reminded me of when Angelina Jolie allegedly paid for a hit man on herself, then it clicked what this woman was paying for, and thats just as masochistic.
C. This is a whole full-fleshed short story. I appreciate that each of these stories involve violence as well. I think as of now, C is my favorite. It would be funnier if the island was Alcatraz or similar, and he was held in solitary confinement, her being the warden. Funny in that his love is likely so abysmally unreciprocated, and that I've heard that prisoner/prison staff affairs are common.
as far as kittens' input regarding cheapening sex by offering it for profit, as long as you aren't relying on commissions you are uninterested in fulfilling, its nothing more than a self-imposed project, honing creative writing skills of a subject matter passionate to you. no one minded when Anne Rice did it 🤷♀️ sex is sacred but its also animalistic, and its a shame that humans load it with moral hang-ups. although if you wrote about passionless fraternity/Jersey Shore club sex where the goal is to get your body count as high as possible that could also be hilarious, especially in seeing what their lives would become down the line, due to what personality would seek zero-emotion sex just to get numbers up: I'd say either a sociopath, or a conservative Christian who would later settle into a frumpy nuclear family.
do you mean visual novel as in a comic book, or visual novel as in the videogame genre.
Making visual novel videogames is the easiest route and can generate money easily if you fill a certain niche. But you'll need some graphics regardless. Unless you try to sell it as an app, I can imagine people reading erotica on their phone without graphics, but then you'd need to produce a lot of content.
In any way, the secret about producing art is to produce a ton of it, rather than just talking about doing it
Making visual novel videogames is the easiest route and can generate money easily if you fill a certain niche. But you'll need some graphics regardless. Unless you try to sell it as an app, I can imagine people reading erotica on their phone without graphics, but then you'd need to produce a lot of content.
In any way, the secret about producing art is to produce a ton of it, rather than just talking about doing it
Posted by hydorah
do you mean visual novel as in a comic book, or visual novel as in the videogame genre.
Making visual novel videogames is the easiest route and can generate money easily if you fill a certain niche. But you'll need some graphics regardless. Unless you try to sell it as an app, I can imagine people reading erotica on their phone, but then you'd need to produce a lot of content.
In any way, the secret about producing art is to produce a ton of it, rather than just talking about doing it
best visual novel dating sim ever was Doki Doki Literature Club
OP I'd recommend playing that, it meshes bodacious harem/yandere interaction with violence and suicide (with a top tier soundtrack)
I think 3 is my favourite, it could be sci fi maybe ? Maybe the female just has sex with men and erases their memory and makes them do crazy stuff like her sex slaves.
2 is also interesting but I would wish it would be more like an action thriller, or maybe like sin city or kill bill lol
2 is also interesting but I would wish it would be more like an action thriller, or maybe like sin city or kill bill lol
Posted by MidAtBest
A is cool and relatable, in that 1. the excitement of anticipating the first time with someone you've wanted bad & 2. I've also considered murder in such a fashion
B. I LOVE IT. at first it reminded me of when Angelina Jolie allegedly paid for a hit man on herself, then it clicked what this woman was paying for, and thats just as masochistic.
C. This is a whole full-fleshed short story. I appreciate that each of these stories involve violence as well. I think as of now, C is my favorite. It would be funnier if the island was Alcatraz or similar, and he was held in solitary confinement, her being the warden. Funny in that his love is likely so abysmally unreciprocated, and that I've heard that prisoner/prison staff affairs are common.
as far as kittens' input regarding cheapening sex by offering it for profit, as long as you aren't relying on commissions you are uninterested in fulfilling, its nothing more than a self-imposed project, honing creative writing skills of a subject matter passionate to you. no one minded when Anne Rice did it 🤷♀️ sex is sacred but its also animalistic, and its a shame that humans load it with moral hang-ups. although if you wrote about passionless fraternity/Jersey Shore club sex where the goal is to get your body count as high as possible that could also be hilarious, especially in seeing what their lives would become down the line, due to what personality would seek zero-emotion sex just to get numbers up: I'd say either a sociopath, or a conservative Christian who would later settle into a frumpy nuclear family.
So B is sexier for you but C is a more gripping story?
That's makes sense, C had a bigger write up.
Yeah, I'm intrinsically linked to sex and violence. Might as well combine my two passions.
I don't think I'll ever get burnt out on the writing stage, I'll only write about things I would want to read.
Posted by hydorah
do you mean visual novel as in a comic book, or visual novel as in the videogame genre.
Making visual novel videogames is the easiest route and can generate money easily if you fill a certain niche. But you'll need some graphics regardless. Unless you try to sell it as an app, I can imagine people reading erotica on their phone without graphics, but then you'd need to produce a lot of content.
In any way, the secret about producing art is to produce a ton of it, rather than just talking about doing it
The only issue in creating a visual novel (game) which is where i have the apprehension, is creating all the renders and animations. I know nothing of how to do so. But I agree, it would be best.
Posted by MidAtBestPosted by hydorah
do you mean visual novel as in a comic book, or visual novel as in the videogame genre.
Making visual novel videogames is the easiest route and can generate money easily if you fill a certain niche. But you'll need some graphics regardless. Unless you try to sell it as an app, I can imagine people reading erotica on their phone, but then you'd need to produce a lot of content.
In any way, the secret about producing art is to produce a ton of it, rather than just talking about doing it
best visual novel dating sim ever was Doki Doki Literature Club
OP I'd recommend playing that, it meshes bodacious harem/yandere interaction with violence and suicide (with a top tier soundtrack)click to expand
Yes I remember it, I found other... more intense visual novels since. I probably get more inspiration from them.
Posted by Polyannanana
I think 3 is my favourite, it could be sci fi maybe ? Maybe the female just has sex with men and erases their memory and makes them do crazy stuff like her sex slaves.
2 is also interesting but I would wish it would be more like an action thriller, or maybe like sin city or kill bill lol
Yes, I definitely had a sci-fi angle in mind for C.
In regards to B, I could definitely take it down a film noir sort of route.
Which story was more of a turn on?
Posted by PiscezPosted by MidAtBest
A is cool and relatable, in that 1. the excitement of anticipating the first time with someone you've wanted bad & 2. I've also considered murder in such a fashion
B. I LOVE IT. at first it reminded me of when Angelina Jolie allegedly paid for a hit man on herself, then it clicked what this woman was paying for, and thats just as masochistic.
C. This is a whole full-fleshed short story. I appreciate that each of these stories involve violence as well. I think as of now, C is my favorite. It would be funnier if the island was Alcatraz or similar, and he was held in solitary confinement, her being the warden. Funny in that his love is likely so abysmally unreciprocated, and that I've heard that prisoner/prison staff affairs are common.
as far as kittens' input regarding cheapening sex by offering it for profit, as long as you aren't relying on commissions you are uninterested in fulfilling, its nothing more than a self-imposed project, honing creative writing skills of a subject matter passionate to you. no one minded when Anne Rice did it 🤷♀️ sex is sacred but its also animalistic, and its a shame that humans load it with moral hang-ups. although if you wrote about passionless fraternity/Jersey Shore club sex where the goal is to get your body count as high as possible that could also be hilarious, especially in seeing what their lives would become down the line, due to what personality would seek zero-emotion sex just to get numbers up: I'd say either a sociopath, or a conservative Christian who would later settle into a frumpy nuclear family.
Lately, I’ve been struggling to write erotica because I’m just not in that headspace all the time. Good erotica needs a certain level of arousal or sensual energy behind it, and right now, my Pisces moon is dominating—spiritual, reserved, and honestly leaning toward prudish and almost asexual. It’s totally overshadowing my Scorpio Venus, which usually fuels that side of me. Still, I have to do it, because the extra income is necessary."click to expand
Sorry I jumped to conclusions based on my own hang-ups. That sounds cool that you're profiting off that, art as a career is stressful (esp when it involves commissions). I'd say only customer service would be more stressful- at least in my experience. And working in a nursing home
Posted by Black-Ops-BerserkerPosted by Polyannanana
I think 3 is my favourite, it could be sci fi maybe ? Maybe the female just has sex with men and erases their memory and makes them do crazy stuff like her sex slaves.
2 is also interesting but I would wish it would be more like an action thriller, or maybe like sin city or kill bill lol
Yes, I definitely had a sci-fi angle in mind for C.
In regards to B, I could definitely take it down a film noir sort of route.
Which story was more of a turn on?click to expand
Oh I meant the first one when I said it could be like kill bill lol. My mistake. Since it's like she hates the guy and is plotting revenge.
Probably the third one because in the first one it's like she isn't enjoying it and he is about to die lol
In the third one I'm imagining her to be like a island jungle queen and the guy is probably hot too 🙂
Posted by Black-Ops-BerserkerPosted by hydorah
do you mean visual novel as in a comic book, or visual novel as in the videogame genre.
Making visual novel videogames is the easiest route and can generate money easily if you fill a certain niche. But you'll need some graphics regardless. Unless you try to sell it as an app, I can imagine people reading erotica on their phone without graphics, but then you'd need to produce a lot of content.
In any way, the secret about producing art is to produce a ton of it, rather than just talking about doing it
The only issue in creating a visual novel (game) which is where i have the apprehension, is creating all the renders and animations. I know nothing of how to do so. But I agree, it would be best.click to expand
If you're good with words, just focus on that and don't bother doing renders. I played some great immersive CYOA games that just had a few old-book style illustrations for atmosphere, OTOH I saw some porn games build an atmosphere just to have it ruined with really ugly nude graphics.
You wouldn't even have to code since there's a lot of VN engines and CYOA engines that let you focus on just writing.
The hardest part would be to prepare several outcomes and branching path stories for the story
It reminds me of those cheap books you could buy in Lokal shops called "Harlequin"
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"This dick feels so good on my lips" she lied.
He moaned in response. "Ssstop" his earlier resistance fading rapidly. Despite his words his hips were starting to buck towards her mouth. Inevitable. She hadn't met a man who could fully refuse her, she knew how good she looked.
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"I don't know my name, my love. But it doesn't matter, I am happy with you."
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"I love you too" she said again.
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He nodded, he would do anything for her. They kissed passionately once more and she pressed the mysterious weapon into his hands once more.
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