@HappyCapper
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Tell me if I'm being overbearing. I want to help - not kill your desire to write.
You are not overbearing.
I want to look at it a bit on the webz about free writing and maybe do some exercises with the control issues. I can tell even from how I am structuring a sentence...where it will go.
I want more exercises, yes. I'll come back during the weekend to do it.
Anything you want to share, throw at me. 😄
Damnta is my fav
She's so sweet
What the heck, I might as well give you the one I was going to give Damnata if she wanted it.
You now have a leo stellium(including sun) in your fifth house and a sag moon. You're ten years old and your mother(gem sun and merc conjunct in her third house asks you about your school trip to the zoo. Give me that dialogue, please. You can do whatever you like with it, just as long as it's beliavable within the frame of the story. Go nuts!
Posted by HappyCapper
What the heck, I might as well give you the one I was going to give Damnata if she wanted it.You now have a leo stellium(including sun) in your fifth house and a sag moon. You're ten years old and your mother(gem sun and merc conjunct in her third house asks you about your school trip to the zoo. Give me that dialogue, please. You can do whatever you like with it, just as long as it's beliavable within the frame of the story. Go nuts!
I'mma post this too, when I do it during the weekend.
Posted by HappyCapper
Tell me if I'm being overbearing. I want to help - not kill your desire to write.You are not overbearing.
I want to look at it a bit on the webz about free writing and maybe do some exercises with the control issues. I can tell even from how I am structuring a sentence...where it will go.
I want more exercises, yes. I'll come back during the weekend to do it.
Anything you want to share, throw at me. 😄
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Well, just be sure to tell me if I am.
I'll think of some more exercises.
Just remember that this is all imo. Other people might think very differently.
Tell me what to throw. 🙂
Posted by HappyCapper
What the heck, I might as well give you the one I was going to give Damnata if she wanted it.You now have a leo stellium(including sun) in your fifth house and a sag moon. You're ten years old and your mother(gem sun and merc conjunct in her third house asks you about your school trip to the zoo. Give me that dialogue, please. You can do whatever you like with it, just as long as it's beliavable within the frame of the story. Go nuts!
I'mma post this too, when I do it during the weekend.
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YaY! 😄
@HappyCancer
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Posted by Palerio
@HappyCancerComment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Post it. 🙂
Posted by Palerio
@HappyCancerComment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Post it. 🙂
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It's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.
Posted by Palerio
@HappyCancerComment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Post it. 🙂
It's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.
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It's really long. I'm tired. Do you have anything shorter?
Posted by Palerio
@HappyCancerComment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Post it. 🙂
It's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.
It's really long. I'm tired. Do you have anything shorter?
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If/when you have time/courage to read it, in a month it's fine 😆
P.s. Hijacking Damnata's thread feels good.
Posted by Palerio
P.s. Hijacking Damnata's thread feels good.
It's ok.
Just wanted to say if anyone wants to share, feel free to do so.
Now that we've trapped HappyCapper in here 😈
Posted by Palerio
@HappyCancerComment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Post it. 🙂
It's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.
It's really long. I'm tired. Do you have anything shorter?
If/when you have time/courage to read it, in a month it's fine 😆
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Read about 1/3 of it, but I'm tired, so I don't know how much of this you should listen to. I think I can see were you're going with it, but it's difficult to read(for me). Inner dialogue. Dialogue with the reader. Narrations. Wordy. Purple. It tries very hard to sound intellectual. It could work, but it needs another level of refinement, imo. It reads first draft. Edit.
Sorry, but you knew all along, I'm a biotch...an honest biotch, but still a biotch. 😉
Posted by Palerio
P.s. Hijacking Damnata's thread feels good.It's ok.
Just wanted to say if anyone wants to share, feel free to do so.
Now that we've trapped HappyCapper in here 😈
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Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! *cries hysterically*
Posted by Palerio
@HappyCancerComment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Post it. 🙂
It's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.
It's really long. I'm tired. Do you have anything shorter?
If/when you have time/courage to read it, in a month it's fine 😆
Read about 1/3 of it, but I'm tired, so I don't know how much of this you should listen to. I think I can see were you're going with it, but it's difficult to read(for me). Inner dialogue. Dialogue with the reader. Narrations. Wordy. Purple. It tries very hard to sound intellectual. It could work, but it needs another level of refinement, imo. It reads first draft. Edit.
Sorry, but you knew all along, I'm a biotch...an honest biotch, but still a biotch. 😉
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I forgot:
What's really good is that you seem comfortable with yourself as a writer, and that's a huge plus. So, edit and it will be fine. 🙂
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Sure. Why not? It's easier when I know something about the person's writing styles, so that I know what potential hurdles there may be(everyone has them, so...). For fun, may I ask what your major aspects to your merc is, including orbs?