Sure. Why not? It's easier when I know something about the person's writing styles, so that I know what potential hurdles there may be(everyone has them, so...). For fun, may I ask what your major aspects to your merc is, including orbs?
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Posted by HappyCapperYou are not overbearing.
Tell me if I'm being overbearing. I want to help - not kill your desire to write.
I want to look at it a bit on the webz about free writing and maybe do some exercises with the control issues. I can tell even from how I am structuring a sentence...where it will go.
I want more exercises, yes. I'll come back during the weekend to do it.
Anything you want to share, throw at me. 😄
Damnta is my fav
She's so sweet
What the heck, I might as well give you the one I was going to give Damnata if she wanted it.
You now have a leo stellium(including sun) in your fifth house and a sag moon. You're ten years old and your mother(gem sun and merc conjunct in her third house asks you about your school trip to the zoo. Give me that dialogue, please. You can do whatever you like with it, just as long as it's beliavable within the frame of the story. Go nuts!
You now have a leo stellium(including sun) in your fifth house and a sag moon. You're ten years old and your mother(gem sun and merc conjunct in her third house asks you about your school trip to the zoo. Give me that dialogue, please. You can do whatever you like with it, just as long as it's beliavable within the frame of the story. Go nuts!
Posted by HappyCapperI'mma post this too, when I do it during the weekend.
What the heck, I might as well give you the one I was going to give Damnata if she wanted it.
You now have a leo stellium(including sun) in your fifth house and a sag moon. You're ten years old and your mother(gem sun and merc conjunct in her third house asks you about your school trip to the zoo. Give me that dialogue, please. You can do whatever you like with it, just as long as it's beliavable within the frame of the story. Go nuts!
Posted by DamnataWell, just be sure to tell me if I am.Posted by HappyCapperYou are not overbearing.
Tell me if I'm being overbearing. I want to help - not kill your desire to write.
I want to look at it a bit on the webz about free writing and maybe do some exercises with the control issues. I can tell even from how I am structuring a sentence...where it will go.
I want more exercises, yes. I'll come back during the weekend to do it.
Anything you want to share, throw at me. 😄click to expand
I'll think of some more exercises.
Just remember that this is all imo. Other people might think very differently.
Tell me what to throw. 🙂
Posted by DamnataYaY! 😄Posted by HappyCapperI'mma post this too, when I do it during the weekend.
What the heck, I might as well give you the one I was going to give Damnata if she wanted it.
You now have a leo stellium(including sun) in your fifth house and a sag moon. You're ten years old and your mother(gem sun and merc conjunct in her third house asks you about your school trip to the zoo. Give me that dialogue, please. You can do whatever you like with it, just as long as it's beliavable within the frame of the story. Go nuts!click to expand
@HappyCancer
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Posted by PalerioPost it. 🙂
@HappyCancer
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Posted by HappyCapperIt's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.Posted by PalerioPost it. 🙂
@HappyCancer
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄click to expand
Posted by PalerioIt's really long. I'm tired. Do you have anything shorter?Posted by HappyCapperIt's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.Posted by PalerioPost it. 🙂
@HappyCancer
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
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Posted by HappyCapperIf/when you have time/courage to read it, in a month it's fine 😆Posted by PalerioIt's really long. I'm tired. Do you have anything shorter?Posted by HappyCapperIt's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.Posted by PalerioPost it. 🙂
@HappyCancer
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
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P.s. Hijacking Damnata's thread feels good.
Posted by PalerioIt's ok.
P.s. Hijacking Damnata's thread feels good.
Just wanted to say if anyone wants to share, feel free to do so.
Now that we've trapped HappyCapper in here 😈
Posted by PalerioRead about 1/3 of it, but I'm tired, so I don't know how much of this you should listen to. I think I can see were you're going with it, but it's difficult to read(for me). Inner dialogue. Dialogue with the reader. Narrations. Wordy. Purple. It tries very hard to sound intellectual. It could work, but it needs another level of refinement, imo. It reads first draft. Edit.Posted by HappyCapperIf/when you have time/courage to read it, in a month it's fine 😆Posted by PalerioIt's really long. I'm tired. Do you have anything shorter?Posted by HappyCapperIt's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.Posted by PalerioPost it. 🙂
@HappyCancer
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
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Sorry, but you knew all along, I'm a biotch...an honest biotch, but still a biotch. 😉
Posted by DamnataNoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! *cries hysterically*Posted by PalerioIt's ok.
P.s. Hijacking Damnata's thread feels good.
Just wanted to say if anyone wants to share, feel free to do so.
Now that we've trapped HappyCapper in here 😈click to expand
Posted by HappyCapperI forgot:Posted by PalerioRead about 1/3 of it, but I'm tired, so I don't know how much of this you should listen to. I think I can see were you're going with it, but it's difficult to read(for me). Inner dialogue. Dialogue with the reader. Narrations. Wordy. Purple. It tries very hard to sound intellectual. It could work, but it needs another level of refinement, imo. It reads first draft. Edit.Posted by HappyCapperIf/when you have time/courage to read it, in a month it's fine 😆Posted by PalerioIt's really long. I'm tired. Do you have anything shorter?Posted by HappyCapperIt's an old post, It's in the writing section somewhere.Posted by PalerioPost it. 🙂
@HappyCancer
Comment on mine too if you survive the reading 😄
Sorry, but you knew all along, I'm a biotch...an honest biotch, but still a biotch. 😉
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What's really good is that you seem comfortable with yourself as a writer, and that's a huge plus. So, edit and it will be fine. 🙂
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